Fanfic URL: http://winglin.net/fanfic/ava_lava3/
Author: ava_lava
Reviewed by: myangelteuk
Title - 5/5
I like the title! It really fits with your story and how the characters lived. For some reason, though the title isn’t very eye-catching, I would still click on it.
Appearance - 4/5
I deducted a point because it kind of looked gloomy but it still looked nice. The background doesn’t interfere with the text so that’s good. I like the quote on the poster because in the story, music brought them all together.
Forewords - 10/10
You have everything that is needed to know about the story! I like that you put just a bit of a description about the characters rather than their whole personality because I think in a way, that would ruin the story.
Storyline - 15/15
Though the storyline is the same as other fanfics, you added something that other fics that has the same storyline that don’t. And that is music. For me, I really loved it! You also made it your own by adding things that other stories don’t. Which is the stink bomb!
Story Flow - 15/15
Not too fast or slow. Perfectly paced. Great job!
Character Development - 15/15
You developed the characters very well. Their personalities and persona matched and that’s really good. I think that you showed their personalities real well. That doesn’t often happen especially because this is an apply fic and also because sometimes people rush to get their applications in that they leave out certain details about themselves. I loved all of the characters personality.
Descriptions - 10/10
Very detailed and thorough.
Correct Spelling/Grammar - 5/5
Nothing is spelled wrong. The grammar is good and the vocabulary is stretched. I think that’s really good. Your writing is style is very nice
Keeping Interest - 10/10
It was very interesting! I really wanted to know more! You got me hooked on the prologue.
Ending - 5/5
Very unpredictable especially the part where Airah gets to dance with her stalker. I loved the ending especially because it was Wednesday!
Bonus Points - 5/5
Bonus for Junior! Well not really, but I really really loved your story! It made me cried at the end because it was Wednesday on Jewel’s wedding! And also, because I am in the story! I will really miss the story so I hope you writing something like this again! Hwaiting and good luck with your other stories.
Total: 99/100
Saturday, July 31, 2010
Thursday, July 29, 2010
Bittersweet Review
Fanfic URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/jaaayswife/
Author: mblaq10
Reviewed by: myangelteuk
Title - 3/5
The title fits your story well but that’s a pretty common title. When I first read the title, it actually gave out a mysterious feeling to it and it made me want to read your story. It's not very eye-catching but it's a nice title.
Appearance - 5/5
I like the poster and background! The background sometimes but not always, interferes with the text so I really couldn’t see it but it was fine because only the top part of the letters gets covered and I could still read it.
Forewords - 10/10
It has everything that the reader needs to know. When I first read the foreword, I thought it will be a good story because of the details that you put in.
Storyline - 14/15
I like it. It's creative and original. I loved the twist you put in! Especially the part where the nurse/doctor happened to be Ga In and that Yoseob actually worked for Taec!
Story Flow - 15/15
It was smooth. It wasn’t fast or slow. Good Job!
Character Development - 15/15
The characters were developed well! I really didn't think that Jo Kwon fits that bodyguard part in the beginning, but you showed that he could and that's cool!
Descriptions - 10/10
Very detailed and thorough.
Correct Spelling/Grammar - 4/5
You have spelling errors here and there. But the most common mistake that you have is using ‘your’ and ‘you’re’ correctly.
Like in this sentence:
"Your a body guard, why would you be scared of me?" Yoesob asked as Jokwon laughed.
It should be:
“You’re a body guard, why would you be scared of me?” Yoseob asked as Jokwon laughed.
Also, since English is a language, it needs to be capitalized. I suggest that you read over each chapter you write for mistakes because you sometimes miss a word.
Keeping Interest - 10/10
I was very interested in the story! There was that certain something that keeps telling me to read more and more!
Ending - 5/5
I like how she got over Taec and is living happily with Yoseob. I also liked that she likes spaghetti in the end!
Bonus Points - 4/5
I like the knocking parts! I think that’s awesome!
Total: 95/100
Author: mblaq10
Reviewed by: myangelteuk
Title - 3/5
The title fits your story well but that’s a pretty common title. When I first read the title, it actually gave out a mysterious feeling to it and it made me want to read your story. It's not very eye-catching but it's a nice title.
Appearance - 5/5
I like the poster and background! The background sometimes but not always, interferes with the text so I really couldn’t see it but it was fine because only the top part of the letters gets covered and I could still read it.
Forewords - 10/10
It has everything that the reader needs to know. When I first read the foreword, I thought it will be a good story because of the details that you put in.
Storyline - 14/15
I like it. It's creative and original. I loved the twist you put in! Especially the part where the nurse/doctor happened to be Ga In and that Yoseob actually worked for Taec!
Story Flow - 15/15
It was smooth. It wasn’t fast or slow. Good Job!
Character Development - 15/15
The characters were developed well! I really didn't think that Jo Kwon fits that bodyguard part in the beginning, but you showed that he could and that's cool!
Descriptions - 10/10
Very detailed and thorough.
Correct Spelling/Grammar - 4/5
You have spelling errors here and there. But the most common mistake that you have is using ‘your’ and ‘you’re’ correctly.
Like in this sentence:
"Your a body guard, why would you be scared of me?" Yoesob asked as Jokwon laughed.
It should be:
“You’re a body guard, why would you be scared of me?” Yoseob asked as Jokwon laughed.
Also, since English is a language, it needs to be capitalized. I suggest that you read over each chapter you write for mistakes because you sometimes miss a word.
Keeping Interest - 10/10
I was very interested in the story! There was that certain something that keeps telling me to read more and more!
Ending - 5/5
I like how she got over Taec and is living happily with Yoseob. I also liked that she likes spaghetti in the end!
Bonus Points - 4/5
I like the knocking parts! I think that’s awesome!
Total: 95/100
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